http://meridiandream.com/blog/2009/04/15/schoolism-assignment-6-chase-scene/ drawing, storytelling, blogging. Tue, 15 Jun 2010 17:37:28 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 http://meridiandream.com/blog/2009/04/15/schoolism-assignment-6-chase-scene/comment-page-1/#comment-252 Adam Ansorge Thu, 16 Apr 2009 12:34:45 +0000 http://meridiandream.com/blog/?p=298#comment-252 People may rip on me for public crit. Sent email. Rip me there:) Good stuff Jim! People may rip on me for public crit. Sent email. Rip me there:) Good stuff Jim!

]]> http://meridiandream.com/blog/2009/04/15/schoolism-assignment-6-chase-scene/comment-page-1/#comment-251 steffen Thu, 16 Apr 2009 11:12:31 +0000 http://meridiandream.com/blog/?p=298#comment-251 Here's the what caught my attention Jim, in a kind of stream of conscience way, for what its worth: I love page 3, it opens great. I dont understand the arrows drawn near 10/3 - 10/5A, I assume its camera moves, but it made me think a sec. I think there's an "under-the-leg" shot for 13, but I'm guessing, so I think thats not clear, or why the cam. would be there. I really like the stumble, that reads well for me. Shot 26(and 30?)- what is she holding? his nose? Shot 27- under the leg shot? confused. By shot 35 I piece together that she has a hold of him, just as she's letting go. Shot 39/1+2- maybe it would be more clear with a head turn arrow and/or an action arrow that shows its the gnarly dog that is moving through the shot. By page 10, i would've liked to see the girl gaining on them, or at least starting to follow again. She kind of suprises me that she's suddenly caught up. I love 65 and 66, antic and push reads great. and 67/2-4, great job on rolling the dog over. 74/2 to 76, did she swallow him? I get it, but I wanted to see something more before it cuts to her mouth closed. Ok. Thats it. I don't know much about storyboarding, but i hope this is constructive for you, Jim. Keep it up! Here’s the what caught my attention Jim, in a kind of stream of conscience way, for what its worth:
I love page 3, it opens great.
I dont understand the arrows drawn near 10/3 – 10/5A, I assume its camera moves, but it made me think a sec.
I think there’s an “under-the-leg” shot for 13, but I’m guessing, so I think thats not clear, or why the cam. would be there.
I really like the stumble, that reads well for me.
Shot 26(and 30?)- what is she holding? his nose?
Shot 27- under the leg shot? confused.
By shot 35 I piece together that she has a hold of him, just as she’s letting go.
Shot 39/1+2- maybe it would be more clear with a head turn arrow and/or an action arrow that shows its the gnarly dog that is moving through the shot.
By page 10, i would’ve liked to see the girl gaining on them, or at least starting to follow again. She kind of suprises me that she’s suddenly caught up.
I love 65 and 66, antic and push reads great.
and 67/2-4, great job on rolling the dog over.
74/2 to 76, did she swallow him? I get it, but I wanted to see something more before it cuts to her mouth closed.
Ok. Thats it. I don’t know much about storyboarding, but i hope this is constructive for you, Jim. Keep it up!

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